My first go at Julia’s prompt for ages, Freedom jumped out at me and my flash fiction wrote itself.
Helpless, me?
Far more subtle than physical abuse, more a creeping way he had of getting under my skin. He projected his own sick feelings of inadequacy that spread like a virus through any sense of self I possessed. He made me believe that I was useless, with no value or purpose at all.
How could I possibly help when he fell into the bowels of Hades Shaft, a disused mine, on Botley moor?
I’d shown him on the map, but he insisted he had the better sense of direction.
Then as the clouds lifted, I found my freedom and he’d met his maker.
Me, helpless?
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great words and post!!
Bless you!
Is this true I wonder, at least in sentiment? Beautifully done Gilly. You are right when you say the piece wrote itself; you can’t really plan something so precise.
I counsel Tony . . .
Hehehe. Karma is a wonderful thing. Love this, Gilly.
Isn’t it just? 🙂
Your new found freedom reminds me so much of the ending of book 1 in my Brides Trilogy, Gilly. It’s almost ghostly. 🙂 I think though, you are a little better at cutting to the chase, than me … I second Sylvia,as she said it best in her comment.
🙂 🙂 🙂 I often wish I was wordier actually, my writing can be too succinct!
I love the efficiency of ‘short’ stories, Gilly. You have a gift, the way I look at it.
100 words… definitely a challenge with my big mouth… Amen, sometimes our best work seems to have been just waiting to get out.
Why not join this weeks challenge Paul?
You do 100 words so well Gilly. So few words and so much sense of character and situation.
Ahh bless you, I wish i was better at writing longer pieces!
A perfect ending. 😀 “…I found my freedom and he’d met his maker.” I just love this, Gilly. Matter-of-fact voice, no sobbing or carrying on. Awesome. ❤
Thanks Tess, sometimes people just have to move on!
I’m not that quick but I enjoyed reading yours, Gilly.
Thanks Ruth, why not give it a go this week?
This was really good, especially the sub-plot. I sat and thought about trying it but I just don’t even know how to start. Nice work!
Just see what pops into your head when you think about the prompt -there’s a new one this week!
I think ive got it 🙂
Great!
Thankyou 🙂
Hmmmm … I agree. There was nothing she could have done to help him — in more ways than one. Very well done, Gilly.
Thanks Sandra!
Crumbs Gilly! That’s dark! Thank you for joining 100wcgu!
I never set out to do dark but it often happens !
Great write, dear friend. 🙂
Thanks sweetheart!
He had it coming, didn’t he Gilly? 😀
Absolutely, and there are many like him!
Enjoyed the journey into the darkness. Well done ..!!! : )
Thank you Issy, we mustn’t longer though must we? 🙂