100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups Week# 49

‘This week is another simple prompt but please forgive me for making it topical to us here in the UK.

….Murray was just about to serve for the Championship when…’

says Julia, over at http://jfb57.wordpress.com/ pop across to join in!

Schizoid Match

Murray was just about to serve for the Championship when they arrived. The voices. All three this time and they were arguing like mad.

‘He has to have new tennis shoes; he’s going through the toes of last year’s.’ Tut.

‘I need shin pads, for Saturday, we’re playing Westchester.’ Get out of my head Aidan.

‘Listen, listen, no-one ever needed this stuff, need is about hunger, a roof over our heads.’ Dad shut up.

‘Murray will put the roof over our heads one day, the boy is gifted.’ No pressure then mum.

‘Ha, even he doesn’t believe that.’

The racquet thudded to the ground. You’re right dad I don’t.

12 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups Week# 49

  1. This is the best I’ve read so far, Gilly! Only the man himself could tell you that was what was going through his head, but, knowing the outcome, it seems entirely plausible. So much of sport is in the head. Well done for a credible journey into his, even if he’d never admit it. After his speech, I reckon everyone has changed their opinion of our current best hope.

  2. Great post, Gilly! That inner monologue (dialogue?) is not easy to do, but I like the different perspectives of his own worth, and the resulting back-and-forth. 🙂

  3. Nicely done. Love the idea of the ‘voices’ and how you attribute them. I’m sure most of us have our parent’s voices in our heads at times whether we recognise them as such or not… But what pressure! I can only imagine how load the voices are at a time like this.

  4. The voices – Oh, the voices. Very nice interpretation for this challenge, Gilly.
    You are so good at this. I am still trying to come up with something and you
    have completed it and you’re off to the next post. You are amazing there dear friend.

  5. And it’s fitting that when all the world is watching, that he can only hear the ones in his head.
    I really like this one, as I think we have all been here at least once. Sometimes it goes swimmingly, and others…not so much.
    Great work!

  6. Your truth — and your point — goes so far beyond a tennis match, Gilly. How fundamental this problem is in the lives of far more people than most would imagine. Very good job.

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